To put it simply: I failed.
Well ... goddamn.
Here.
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The Song Lyrics Edition
This year's edition uses song lyrics as a jumping off point.
Prompts for upcoming stories are directly below. Past prompts and links to the associated stories, along with a link to last year's archives, can be found in the next sidebar down.
Jun.- “I am stuck here in a moment.”
Jul.- “I don’t claim to be no gambler. I don’t know much about the dice.”
Aug.- “I think I’ll just stay here and drink”
Sept.- “Now it’s over; I’m dead and I haven’t done anything that I want, or I’m still alive and there’s nothing I want to do.”
Oct.- “She woke in the morning/She knew that her life had passed her by/She called out a warning/Don't ever let life pass you by.”
Nov.- “We could talk about the lives we've led/And count the reasons we're not dead/Or maybe we could talk instead/About the ways in which we are.”
Dec.- “You picked a fine time to leave me, Lucille.”
"And how can we win/When fools can be kings."
"A Notebook Found in the Street" by Robby
"Leon de Normandy" by René
"If You’re Going to Preach, for God’s Sake, Preach with Conviction" by J.
"And then you take that love you made/And stick it into some/Someone else's heart/Pumpin' someone else's blood."
"Justin" by Robby
"Love" by René
"Don't worry, we'll all float on/Even if things get heavy, we'll all float on."
"July 12, 2006" by Robby
"Santiago" by René
"Hey Joe, where you goin' with that gun in your hand?"
"Normal" by Robby
"Excess Stress" by René
1 comment:
It's a good start. You should definitely finish it.
Aside from being unfinished, the main thing that bothered me was the confusion bewteen Kaleb's daydreams and reality. The initial one is fine, the reader should be a little disoriented there. But the other daydreams should be clearly seperated, perhaps by making the daydreams all in italics.
I got lost when Kaleb was imagining going through his family tree, but going over it again I like that section. It's well-written and funny. You just need to excise the confusion.
But above all, finish it before you start revising.
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